Instinct

Ooohhhh, this is getting good.

Pardon any mistakes I have missed. I am quite tired since I've made this short review.

Finished reading the new build, and I have a few comments I have to make for the team.

I almost thought you were going to follow in the footsteps of the analog horror 'The Painter'. It was popular for the super unsettling descriptions, which hit hard in the beginning. However, the more you watched the series, the more boring it became. You became desensitised from all of those sick descriptions. What made it famous was the primary factor for what killed the series.

The first hallucination was done extemely well, but the second one didn't hit as hard as it did before. I can't put my finger on how I would improve it in the first place, sadly. Just going with gut instinct; I think I simply expected something similar to the first hallucination. Same goes with the dream hallucination. The dream hallucination felt a little jarring when introduced -- Plus, it didn't feel too shocking in it of itself. Another comment about the dream, I also found it a little difficult to visualise the scene in the first place.

In the second hallucination, it became glaringly obvious that these weren't simple hallucinations. When the protagonist decided to search up her name, I didn't really get that 'Ooooohh! That does sense!' Instead, I was only confirmed with something I already knew. It was the same as zoning out of a conversation, and only saying 'Cool' and 'Yep'. However, contradictory to the plainness I felt, it still managed to hook me for the next build to come out.

All of this could be just me, but every piece of feedback can help immensely. But don't forget that these are just opinions -- not a summary of what everyone thinks of it. I am not entitled to make a final say on your behalf, or anyone elses opinion.

I love this VN so much, and it has so much potential. I want this to be the best story it could be. I wish you all the best of luck, for both Ari and the team. Stay safe.

TL:DR: The hallucinations are losing the emotional weight they once had, comparing the both of them to the first and the second hallucinations.

Also, do yall have a public discord? It would be neat if I could drop in and say hi.

Oh damn. How did I miss the release of the next update? Silly me.

Is this going to be continued, if it is, would love to play it again!

ughhhh all the good ones are so shoooort
Cant wait to see more though!!!

absolutely lovin it so far!

the character sprites are eye candy, can’t wait for the next build

Great start! I'm excited to see what comes next :>

Gomen, Amanai.